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Cut scene time. This is what got cut from the very end of last section (for whatever reason, I decided not to put it in the last notes).
Toby stepped off the bridge, and stumbled his way to the guest kitchen. He fell into one of the chairs and tried to shake the rest of his terror out of his system. Tre breezed through, giving the area a quick visual inspection. He stopped at Toby, poking him, and giving him a soft, concerned look. Toby looked up him.
“What just happened?”
Basically, Toby is overwhelmed and confused by Xiphos’s sudden… whatever it was.
Why it was taken out:
I think it was weird enough as it, and I think Toby’s weirded out enough, as is Xiphos by her own impulsiveness.
So there it is.
We’ve hit sea monsters already, here’s the hurricane aspect of Ta Ante. Again, this is pretty common. Witness how quickly Cait orders the Rose to the rescue! Any boat would. Galle doesn’t because, well, revenge and all. Witness how he deflects the question!
I’m going to be honest with you: I thought the map and knife thing Paul-Henri did was cheesy, but I couldn’t come up with anything else to show off how bad-ass these guys could be.
I think that’s all I got for today. As always, any questions and comments are totally welcome.
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I thought Paul-Henri was pretty great. He was all like ‘look dude, we’re not just a bunch of clowns.’ I guess one of them could be juggling bombs or something. You’re right, its hard to make circus-folk seem menacing. Unless they really were a bunch of clowns.. thats scary enough.
That was kind of the idea. They can handle themselves. Although having the cast of the Kelonio attack the Travelers in clown paint would be totally amazing. That’s scare the shit out of me.